Ok. I made a few changes to tone and explaination, as well as cleaning some of the discussion in the park. Now, I left quite a bit in, but hopefully, it'll work with the removal of Wells' contrition. I think that was the key to the issue, his 180 degree turnabout. Now, it's sill there, sorta, but Laura adds the element of explanation. Let me know what you think.
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Date: 2006-11-13 04:47 pm (UTC)