"Okay," he said. "I'm busted." He gained a sheepish look. "The company I work for is very good at tracking down where I am. I figured if I told you that I was here on business and was flying out tonight, it would make for a better story. If the company came asking questions, the most you could tell them is that you picked up a businessman who was here for a short time." He reached forward, placed his hand on Sharon's. "I'm sorry. I shouldn't have lied to you. Really, it was to protect you." So ok.... i like having a nosy hard-assed romantic taxi driver in this story, but this little speech blew me out of the water. The man you've painted for us is careful to the point of paranoia (he has to be) - and here he is coming clean to a cabbie???? ---------------------------------------------- Business?" Sharon interrupted. "What was it Marley said? 'Mankind is my business!' Will the business fail if you aren't there tomorrow? If you miss work for one day?"
"Well," Laura admitted, "no."
"And?" Sharon continued. "You do realize that this man, and even though he lied through his teeth to me, he's a good man, you do realize that this man has taken the day off from HIS job, don't you?"
"But..." Laura protested.
"I don't think this is a time for buts, Missy." Sharon turned to Wells. "Hey! You! Mister I lied to the cab driver." She squinted an eye at him through the mirror. "You married?"
*wince* So ok.... he *did* own up to his lie to a stranger, and for no apparent reason, felt guilty over it. Now the cabbie is suddenly bossy and lecturing them both, and they are *submissive*??? Who would tolerate this much from a cabbie?? Mind you, i've never actually BEEN in a cab, so maybe i'm just speaking from sheer ignorance here....
Trouble is, i like what you're doing, but this section is hitting me all wrong. These two incredibly intelligent adults, not *young* adults either, are respectfully, *meekly* listening to this woman's "advice", and it strikes me just wrong.
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And then....
Date: 2006-11-12 03:23 pm (UTC)"Okay," he said. "I'm busted." He gained a sheepish look. "The company I work for is very good at tracking down where I am. I figured if I told you that I was here on business and was flying out tonight, it would make for a better story. If the company came asking questions, the most you could tell them is that you picked up a businessman who was here for a short time." He reached forward, placed his hand on Sharon's. "I'm sorry. I shouldn't have lied to you. Really, it was to protect you."
So ok.... i like having a nosy hard-assed romantic taxi driver in this story, but this little speech blew me out of the water. The man you've painted for us is careful to the point of paranoia (he has to be) - and here he is coming clean to a cabbie????
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Business?" Sharon interrupted. "What was it Marley said? 'Mankind is my business!' Will the business fail if you aren't there tomorrow? If you miss work for one day?"
"Well," Laura admitted, "no."
"And?" Sharon continued. "You do realize that this man, and even though he lied through his teeth to me, he's a good man, you do realize that this man has taken the day off from HIS job, don't you?"
"But..." Laura protested.
"I don't think this is a time for buts, Missy." Sharon turned to Wells. "Hey! You! Mister I lied to the cab driver." She squinted an eye at him through the mirror. "You married?"
*wince* So ok.... he *did* own up to his lie to a stranger, and for no apparent reason, felt guilty over it. Now the cabbie is suddenly bossy and lecturing them both, and they are *submissive*??? Who would tolerate this much from a cabbie?? Mind you, i've never actually BEEN in a cab, so maybe i'm just speaking from sheer ignorance here....
Trouble is, i like what you're doing, but this section is hitting me all wrong. These two incredibly intelligent adults, not *young* adults either, are respectfully, *meekly* listening to this woman's "advice", and it strikes me just wrong.
*wince*
*waits to hear*